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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources, while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #space #exploration #waste #resources #mankind #universe
Space
exploration
 is a debatable topic and some believes that it is crucial exploring
further
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further, although
although
 along with many others, I believe it is a waste of money and should be better spent on exploring our own
planet
, which is fully unexplored yet. According to some
space
exploration
 has benefited human beings in many ways and one of the main
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 is it allows humans to prepare for potential hazards. The universe is a vast place where hidden dangers could be lurking almost anywhere. Even if one
consider
Suggestion
considers
 only solar system, there are asteroid and comet treats which could devastate the Earth if an impact were to occur.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 think carry on to research
space
 gives an opportunity to locate these hazards in advance to prepare an encounter in preserving the race.
Nevertheless
, above mentioned issues are unseen and not primary, whereas exploring our own
planet
 will solve many major issues
such
 as the seabed, especially around the volcanic regions, is relatively unexplored, as is Antarctica. One recent news story about a ‘lost tribe’
also
 highlighted the fact that we are not in contact with all indigenous people across the
planet
. The scientific knowledge
obtainable
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obtained
 from our own
planet
, particularly organisms that inhabit locations with extreme conditions, offers far more value than that of
space
.
Furthermore
, there are many starving and unclothed people around the world, where even basic needs are not fulfilled to expect any advancement in life through
space
exploration
. In conclusion,
space
exploration
 is not of immediate necessity to invest huge amount of money, while these
money
Suggestion
monies
moneys
 can be better spent on exploring own
planet
 and fulfilling primary needs of many poor people around the globe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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