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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those crimes?

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Throughout the world, the ratio of criminal activities has increased significantly.
This
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 essay will cover
different reasons
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the different reasons
 for
such
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 increase and it will
also
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 discuss ways of dealing with
such
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 offences.
Firstly
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, there are several causes of crime those take place in our
society
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 nowadays. It is observed, lack of
law
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 and order creates a
society
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, where people intend to commit a crime because they know that the
law
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 is followed properly. Apart from
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, in countries where
Government
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the Government
 has failed to provide basic necessities of
life
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 to its public, people start to rob banks and wealthier members of
society
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 as they have become deprived of food, shelter and clothing.
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, crimes are
also
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 done by drugs addicted individuals for
sake
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the sake
 of having
adventure
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adventures
 in
life
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. Due to
drugs
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a drugs
 overdose, they become psycho-patient and their mind inclines them to commit crimes.
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, there are several ways by which crimes can be controlled. Government must enforce
law
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 and order throughout the country.
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, it must create a system which can monitor performance of individuals throughout different
forces
the front of the human head from the forehead to the chin and ear to ear
faces
 so officers will not be able to misuse their powers and will
also
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 not be able to accept
bribe
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bribes
. Apart from that, Government should help to provide livelihood to those who are living
life
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 below
poverty line
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the poverty line
.
As a result
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 of
this
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, they will not commit crimes to get money for living
life
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. To conclude,
this
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 essay has covered number of reasons, those lead to
increasing
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increased
 illegal activities in
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society namely
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society, namely
 lack of
law
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 abiding, unavailability of livelihood and drug overdose.
However
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,
this
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 has covered some ways through which unlawful activities could be reduced
such
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 as enforcement of
law
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, providing basic necessities and removing corruption and bribe from
society
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.

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