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Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work. Others think it is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that a person in casual wear is not considered as a professional in
business world
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the business world
. Eventually, it turned into a topic of argument whether a dress code is important for employees or just an unnecessary demand of your job. Though, I think that a
uniform
 brings professionalism and
descipline
a branch of knowledge
discipline
 in a worker while its absence is considered as a sense of freedom.
Corporate world
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The corporate world
 is always imagined as the suit and boot world.
Therefore
, they follow the strict rule of a proper
uniform
 at
workplace
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the workplace
. The main reason for the same is that It helps them to create
an
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a
 work environment where people learn to adhere the rules by differentiating between their personal and professional clothing style. Even an article published in NYT stated that corporate uniforms are a symbol of singularity which keep everyone in office at same level
irresepective
in spite of everything; without regard to drawbacks
irrespective
 of their financial health.
On the other hand
,
millenials
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millennials
 prefer the sense of
independance
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
 by choosing their office wear by themselves. They find
this
 rule too much barbaric and it reminds them of slavery.
For instance
, an employee who is very good
in
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at
 his job
can not
can not
cannot
 be defined by his
uniform
.
Therefore
, it is
unwanted restriction
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an unwanted restriction
 on a person's lifestyle. In conclusion, I
always support
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have always supported
 a proper
uniform
 in
office
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the office
 so that everyone follows their work ethics
properly
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proper
.
Although
,
Accept space
,
 the new generation does not like
such
 boundaries and find it irrelevant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote unity
  • sense of belonging
  • eliminate dress code issues
  • professional appearance
  • enhance the company's image
  • suppress individuality
  • personal expression
  • balanced approach
  • public interaction
  • professionalism
  • personal attire
  • without public exposure
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