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Dieting can change a person's life for the better or ruin one's health completely.What is your opinion?

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There is no doubt these days healthy
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 are contributing of healthy health.
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, the question: Does the healthy
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 modifies our lives to healthy one? Is considered one of the most controversial questions today. In
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 essay I am going to examine both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits considerably outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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 is the statistics, which showed the percentage of the people who used to eat and sleep, healthy have a much less proportion of cancer and heart diseases.In the USA
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, most of the citizens are eating junk
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 and
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 after many years they get overweight and
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 absolutely the will start to complain about signs and symptoms of heart diseases.
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, It is
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 possible to say that there is a relationship between dieting and age good illustration for
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 the oldest people who used to eat and drink healthy in the entire of their life are living much longer than those who do not care about their lifestyle.
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 possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often argued that there are no advantages from having certain a good lifestyle people are having
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 opinion because they do not have enough time to prepare their healthy
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.
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, some of them, they do not have adequate money to buy a healthy
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. A particularly good example in
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 Diet Centre versus Mcdonalsd, if we compare the prices of those restaurants the fast
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 restaurant is much cheaper than healthy
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. We have seen there is no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that the healthy
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 and drink could bring health and better life for our generation.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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