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Playing team sports is good for children to prepare for working life or not. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While a section of people believes that working in a group is beneficial to kids in a long run, while others think the opposite. I firmly believe that playing a
team
 sport enhances the interaction and management skill
that is
 required later in
working environment
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the working environment
.
Firstly
, a squad game improves the
conversation
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conversational
 skill of a person.
One
 can overcome their shyness and discuss the game strategy within the
team
. It
also
 teaches
team
 work which is an important requirement in every job. Understanding counter-
parr's
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parse
parts
parrs'
 problems and managing it efficiently is
also
 a required skill in every office-goer.
Although
, many thinks
one
 has to grow alone in professional life and not with the help of a
team
. To make a group win,
one
 can share and discuss their
strategies but
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strategies, but
 in office
one
 needs to be selfish. In order to get
promotion
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a promotion
promotions
 and better pay,
one
 cannot afford to share their creative ideas.
However
, I believe that group game teaches a lot that helps us in our professional life. Even in
office
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the office
,
one
 needs to be a part of the
team
 and work for
growth
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the growth
 of
company
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the company
a company
companies
. It is up to children of what skills they learn from their
team
 sport and apply later. Kids do learn a lot from their partners which can be detrimental for their personal growth as well
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