Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days more and more people are involved in distinct leagues of employment. While, some people are of opinion that the people are disappointed with their jobs and
low
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lower
paying
wage
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wages
,
Accept space
,
other
thinkthe
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think the
patience and courage to pursue
success
is needed to overcome harsh period.I personally agree that the hard working
pay
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pays
off in
future
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the future
only if we focused on our
work
wisely. It is certainly true that so many people are
compell
force somebody to do something
compelled
to do
job
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the job
a job
jobs
without their satisfaction and low paid salary. It's because one key to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their basic needs is only that
job
.
In addition
, they just go with
flow
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the flow
that their life
take
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takes
them and try to approach some happiness in that
job
.
For instance
, in
middle class family
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a middle class family
, they are obliged to join those low wage
job
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jobs
without interest only to
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
peruse
parse
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyles
.
Hence by
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Hence, by
accepting their bad circumstance they live their life.
In contrast
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
argued that we must have
positive attitude
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a positive attitude
to enhance the
success
over bad period.
Firstly all
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Firstly, all
the
thing
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things
may not turn out the way we thought they would. So we must have patience to tolerate those bad things and motivate ourselves to look forward toward
success
by approaching
appropriate hard
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the appropriate hard work
work
. Let illustrate by poor student, who
aren't
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isn't
able to pay school fees.
Inspite
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In spite
they tried to get
scholarship
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a scholarship
by
geeting
the act of acquiring something
getting
good grade
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good grades
a good grade
in
examination
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the examination
.
Lastly to
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Lastly, to
get victory over
work
, one's
must
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Must
be proactive
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
focosed
being in focus or brought into focus
focused
focussed
on
work
. In
nutshell
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a nutshell
, its significant to maintain
positive mindset
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a positive mindset
to achieve a successful career. I
also
reckon that we mustn't give up our desired
job
. Despite accepting bad situation, we must have
courage
Suggestion
the courage
and power to achieve
success
in our life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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