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Whether boys and girls should attend separate schools is a controversial issue. Some people believe that it brings many benefits. However, others believe that it is not good for the future of our children. I agree with those people who think that children should attend the same schools. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons to support my opinion.

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The diagram illustrates the way how to make the bricks for the building industry. There are 7 main processes and specific days how long it takes to make those things. Overall, the bricks are combined with clay, sand and water, so, they are going to mix and heat them.
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 of all, workers dig the clays with the digger. And
then
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, put clays on the metal grid to extract only them. Those are
became
Suggestion
becoming
 small by metal grid and move to combine with sand and water. After that point, there are two methods to make
rectangle appearance
Suggestion
a rectangular appearance
rectangular appearance
 which is familiar to us: use wire cutter or put
mixture
Suggestion
the mixture
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
mould
Suggestion
the mould
a mould
moulds
.
Next
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, dry the mixture in the drying oven for 24 to 48. After
this
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 step, kiln them in moderate temperature between 200`C~400`C in a brick kiln. Heat again them in high temperature between 870`C~1300`C and put them in cooling chamber for 2 to 3days. From that point, pack the bricks properly, so that it will not break down with each other and the bricks will be delivered to building industry company by drivers.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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