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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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It is known to all, that beauty spots are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 lost in many countries with the increase in population. Natural beauty centres are adversely affected with the increased population and growing urban centres. It is a problem which needs to be addressed before it is too late and all the natural beauty fades away. With population increase, not only demand and supplies are
affected but
Accept comma addition
affected, but
 area is
also
 a major factor which is affected. Shopping centres, stores, offices, buildings will be constructed to meet the new demands.
This
 raises a major concern as the space is limited in many countries,
hence
 the existing natural places and areas are being destroyed.
This
 affects Climate and nature. There can be many measures which must be ensured before any natural spots are destroyed.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 must abide by the rule of not acquiring the natural spots for the construction of huge buildings or offices. Even people visiting the places throw
garbages
Suggestion
the garbages
 everywhere and do not bother to keep it clean. They must maintain a healthy environment for others. There must be guards

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