Shops should give preference to selling local foods rather than imported foods. Do you agree or disagree?

In the view of some
people
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the consumption of indigenous
of
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foods ought to be promoted in order to increase the per
capital
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capita
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income of the
country
,
while
some groups think emphasis on importation is key. In my opinion,I completely agree that local foods should be given higher priority in the
socity
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society
in order to motivate local farmers. First,most
economy
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economies
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are doing well today as
result
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a result
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of how they have performed in the area of agriculture and these in effect are achieved by creating awareness to the citizens on the importance of consuming locally made goods which have
a
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mutiplier
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multiplier
effects on the economy in general. At the moment,most
country
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have
diversify
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by ensuring that
adquate
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adequate
funds are allocated
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farming through government and
private
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privately
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assisted schemes and these have
indeeded
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indeed
played a vital role.
Additionally
,it will create job opportunities
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the unemployed and underemployed,
as well as
reduce the poverty level in the
country
as a whole,because
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employers will need people to work in different
capacity
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.Take
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example,
Poultry
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the Poultry
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business will require the services of
workors
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workers
to achieve the goal of setting up the venture.
Furthermore
,it
encourage
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the establishement
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establishement
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establishment
of necessary infrastructures which the government puts
is
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in
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place
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to entice most people to invest in locally made good by ways of good roads,steady power supplies,security etc These measure brings in development by way of upholding the basic amenities
as
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a means reminding the citizens of the support of the central government.
In addition
,there is always
drastic
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increase in
the
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revenue by way of taxation and some other ways of income generation which are derived by other means and at the same time salary paid to staffers helps them to meet family financial obligations in the forms of paying school fees,water bills etc
For example
,Rent
paif
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paid
pain
to owners of the shops and the circulation of money within the economy
do
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not create linkage in the system. In conclusion,the importance of selling local foods can not be
over emphasised
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as it serves it is a means of income generation for the
country
and at
same
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time
assist
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families
to solve
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their financial challenges.

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