Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and whether they are married or single. Sometimes people say that information may be relevant and useful. Other disagree.

Many
times
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times, companies
times companies
company
asking to
job
seeker about their personal
life
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life, such
such
as hobbies, interests and married status. One segment of the society
consider
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considers
their
information
as useless, but other group
accept
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accepts
this
information
as valuable aspects of
job
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the job
a job
. In
this
essay, we try to look both opinions. According to one point of view, personal
information
about
employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
is beneficial for
company
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a company
the company
companies
because of
this
they come to know about their personality or family history.
For
example if
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example, if
a married woman who have two small
kid
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kids
, a
job
which require more travelling and working late will not be suitable for her and she will not be able to perform well.
In addition
the organisation can get to know what type of person the candidate could be and make use of his or her personal skill or strength for the
company
.
In
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From
my point of view, I think that asking personal
information
when applying for a
job
will useful for
employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employees
as well as
company
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the company
companies
. We should understand and take it positively.
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