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Some people belie that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinions?

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These days, human are being progressively replaced by artificial intelligent robots in the workshop. Thought it
is
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was
 possible that all the physicals, unskilled works will require a machine, it is impossible to perform
work
 those deals with precise skilled and human feelings.
This
 essay will demonstrate only minor
work
 will be performed by
human being
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human beings
a human being
. Eventually, all the works that
does not need
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do not need
 any specific
knowledge but
Accept comma addition
knowledge, but
 only require labour will be mechanized by the android. Many factories and companies believed that if those menial jobs are
dined
declare untrue; contradict
denied
 by the automatic machine, it could save both time and money rather than spending upon hiring, training and employing human. In restaurants in Nepal,
for instance
, many waiters and cashiers have
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
 replaced by artificial machines that consume less money.
Furthermore
, those artificial robots can
work
 all day and night without any rest and salary, so that human labour will be changed with robotic intelligence, if only it doesn't need any sort of skilled to perform
work
.
On the contrary
, there are certain jobs that
can not
can not
cannot
 be replaced by robots because
manmade
not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially
man-made
 robots can never reach
to
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into
real human's brain
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the real human's brain
.In
simple way
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a simple way
, to do
such
 as doctor, medicines and social
work
, ones must have both skilled and emotions, which is
absence
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absent
 in artificial robots. Unless, those works are not done by skilled human, it cannot be satisfied.
Hence
, robots will never be able to achieve those skills of human which has existed in human's brain. Highly sophisticated, complex works will always need human skills,
however
 unskilled will eventually
complete
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
compete
by
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with
 robots. For these
reason
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reasons
 only few
work
 will be available for human in today's world.
it
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It
 is most likely that
machine
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the machine
 will continue its employment by replacing human in most works
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  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • automation
  • robotics
  • futuristic developments
  • analyze data
  • analytical precision
  • human capabilities
  • emotional intelligence
  • human interaction
  • human oversight
  • strategic decision-making
  • nuances of human judgment
  • technological landscape
  • intrinsic human qualities
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