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The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
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 choose
high paying
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high-paying
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jobs
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. Others prefer
jobs
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 they find satisfying even if the salary is low.
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 I admit that it is important to earn enough to make a living, in my opinion,
job
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 satisfaction is more important than the size of the pay package.
Job
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 satisfaction increases productivity. If
people
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 like their
jobs
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, no one has to force them to go to work. No one has to supervise them. They will perform their
job
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 on their own and with utmost interest and concentration.
This
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 interest that they show will automatically improve the results and help them achieve more in less time.
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,
people
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 who choose a particular
job
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 just because it
is paying
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 well will find it rather difficult to stay motivated. They have to push themselves to work every morning. Because of
this
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 lack of interest in the
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, they make more errors and take longer to finish tasks.
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, they have to stay late at the office. The long working hours will eventually affect their health and family life. Take,
for instance
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, the case of IT professionals. The IT industry pays well, but the
jobs
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 are extremely stressful and demanding. Someone who chooses a
job
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 in
this
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 industry just because the salaries are good will eventually burn out unable to cope with the pressures of the
job
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. On the flip side, rewarding
jobs
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 may not always pay well at the beginning. But over time, the workers' enthusiasm and dedication will make the
job
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 a lucrative career option.
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, there are lots of
people
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 who turned their hobbies into successful career options. It was their love for the
job
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 that ultimately helped them.
To conclude
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,
job
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 satisfaction is certainly more important than the money earned. If
people
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 love their
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job
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, eventually, they will
also
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 earn well.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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