International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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Of late, the trend of visiting new geographical areas has been immensely popular amongst Tourists. It has changed the dynamics of world substantially. Many believe it to be favourable, for the localities as it brought many advantages, while others found it to be harmful

for

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their

cultutre

a particular society at a particular time and place

culture

cultures

. I would argue for the benefits, it brought.

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with, Tourists leave behind the traces of their marks. As, they

explores

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explore

more of newer places and its cultural heritages, the chances are that, religious beliefs get impacted. Locals do not feel

pleasant

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pleased

about

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change.

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, in India, when foreigners visit the Sikh Temples, they don't cover their head very often, which is a mandatory ritual to follow.

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, few

locals

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local

children tend to mock the same.

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, many irresponsible tourists

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have not been

very cautious about the cleanliness of those places, they roam around. They do spread the garbage sometimes, out of their ignorance.

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this

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paradigm shift is beneficial to bring more diversities. When tourists roam around the different regions and inspired by their traditions, sometimes, they take it back it to their home countries. To illustrate, Holi, a

colour

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colourful

festival of India, is being celebrated in many countries across the globe.

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, one country's local religion has found a space to flourish. During the visits, travellers, who explore and understand the other religions, get inspired too. As it gains popularity, many secular countries

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in need of skilled manpower, comes forward and provide them the required space to flourish.

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, in Canada, there are many

Hindu

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Hindus

and Sikh temples,

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been established

Canadian government

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the Canadian government

so that Indians do not feel isolated home away. In conclusion,

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trend has contributed a lot, in

expansion

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the expansion

of the local cultural heritage to a much larger scale, by enthusiastic globe trotters' great intentions and eventually transforming the world

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as a small global village.

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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some students choose to work or travel after leaving school and before going to university. Many people, however, say that working experience is more useful in adult life than travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?