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both the poor and rich find the accessibility in to university difficult. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the advent of technology, more and more children want to be financially independent by joining the workforce post-graduation. But with the rise in demand to get
university
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a university education
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, the pressure to secure a seat in the university is increasingly getting challenging for both wealthy and not so wealthy people.
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 essay will argue that despite having an equal probability to get admission why wealthy people stand a greater chance to gain access in higher
education
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 institutions. Over the years since the demand for higher
education
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 has become a trend in a society, resultantly getting an admission into a higher university is increasingly becoming difficult for both extremes of society – rich or poor. Because of
growing imbalance
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the growing imbalance
 between the demand and supply to get higher
education
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 owing to a limited number of seats and teacher to student ratio, parents from all spheres of financial spectrum are struggling to have their children admitted.
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 fact is compounded by the result that the ratio of children not educated post-secondary
education
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 is growing at a rapid pace especially in developing countries.
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, the amount of wealth is not a determinant factor in deciding whether a child gets the opportunity to pursue higher
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 or not.
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 securing a spot for graduation or post-graduation is becoming an issue for everyone in the society, people with monetary muscle power still hold an edge to guarantee a position for their children. The above argument is even more strongly supported by the signs that show the gradual inclination of
education
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 industry towards commercialization. An example to complement
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 is evident in the growth of management (donation) quota in every institute primarily among the developing nations. So, to argue that both wealthy and poor children stand an equal chance for a degree is skewed and only partially correct.

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