Many working people get littler or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Most of workers at present avoid doing

exercise

in their rest days after working.

Finally

, It causes serious health problems like a overweight.

Furtunately

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Fortunately

, it is getting more people who realized how

exercise

is important for

body

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the body

.

Still people

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Still, people

leave work out behind of a schedule of the day. There are

few reasons

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a few reasons

that

this

situation

occured

come to pass

occurred

and became the issue in the whole world.

First

of all, there are various things to do for entertainments. People always get

stresses

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stressed

from work and try to find how to reduce it. Even lots of people feel pain all of bodies after working over 8 hours with

same position

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the same position

. So they do not want

use

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to use

thier

of them or themselves

their

body any more and decided to

sitting

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sit

on a couch or

liding

on a bed in their afternoon. Honestly, I am

also

tired after working and standing 8 hours.

Although

I have

plan

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planned

to walking or going to

gym

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the gym

everyday, but it is less than 3 days

of

from a particular thing or place or position

off

a week to follow

this

plan. Because being a 'potato couch' is

easiler

posing no difficulty; requiring little effort

easier

than go out to walk.

Tireness

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Tires

make people lazy and stay at home with calmness.

Secondly

, There are replacements in a medical ways and it is much

convience

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convenient

convenience

convinced

. Regardless

overstatments

making to seem more important than it really is

overstatements

or honest

explaination

a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.

explanation

explanations

, people

prefer

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prefers

to buy a medicine and machines. According to increasing of people who have pills as vitamins, iron and so on, more and more companies

competite

properly or sufficiently qualified or capable or efficient

competent

competed

to develop their medicines. Eventually, people can get great qualities of drugs for body immune.

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Also, it

takes just

few seconds

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a few seconds

to take

thoes

plural of that

those

these

this

kinds of vitamins

everyday

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every day

. To solve

this

circumstance, the societies and the governments try to help people are

interest

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interested

in

exercise

. An

atmoshpere

a particular environment or surrounding influence

atmosphere

of society is important that people act something.

For instance

, only 5 years ago in Korea, the city council of Seoul made a

video

to

showing

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show

what results come out after exercising for a week. Starting of

this

video

, exercising became one of

trands

a general direction in which something tends to move

trends

for

few months

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a few months

. Lots of people registered a gym, yoga or swimming. 3 months later, the council interviewed people who doing

exercise

and made another

video

again. Of

course

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course, this

this

video

also

effected huge wind. As a

results

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result

, a number of overweight are decreased at the moment. In conclusion, people enjoy drinking or

over eating

eating to excess (personified as one of the deadly sins)

overeating

after work to get rid of stress and they do not

exercise

, even stretching. It is enormous problems every

countries

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country

and there are lots of solutions that people enjoy leisure activities for their health. I think that

efforts

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the efforts

of people

is

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are

the most important condition, but

suppoting

furnishing support and encouragement

supporting

of governments is essential to maintain their purpose.