Many working people get littler or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?
Most of workers at present avoid doing
exercise
in their rest days after working. Finally
, It causes serious health problems like a overweight. Furtunately
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from work and try to find how to reduce it. Even lots of people feel pain all of bodies after working over 8 hours with Suggestion
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on a bed in their afternoon. Honestly, I am also
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the gym
of
a week to follow from a particular thing or place or position
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exercise
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show
this
video
, exercising became one of trands
for a general direction in which something tends to move
trends
few months
. Lots of people registered a gym, yoga or swimming. 3 months later, the council interviewed people who doing Suggestion
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exercise
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exercise
, even stretching. It is enormous problems every countries
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