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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweight the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people believe that technological advancements of radioactive substance may bring far more positive impacts than those drawbacks,
for instance
, nuclear
powerplants
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power plants
 are claimed to be affordable and environmentally green as well as the threats of nuclear weapon products make us in
peaceful life
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a peaceful life
.
However
, I would not have to support the idea that nuclear can create safe and reliable energy in the future. On the one hand, there are clear arguments why some support nuclear advancements.
First
 and foremost, they claimed nuclear
powerplants
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power plants
 can emit energy with
minimum reaction process
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the minimum reaction process
.
This
 low combustion process can overcome to the other types
powerplants
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power plants
 which allegedly cause
intense rise
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an intense rise
the intense rise
 of global temperature. Another reason can be that nuclear weapons with their severe effects in our biological and environmental system can make us stay away from international disputes and
farware
software that is provided without charge
freeware
.
On the other hand
, I would agree the viewpoint that nuclear technology
have
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has
 several
drammatical
of or pertaining to grammar
grammatical
 tragedies over our civilisation. We may remember the tragedy of Chernobyl in 1978 and Fukushima in 2011 which caused those vicinities have been uninhabitable for many decades until nowadays.
Moreover
, our scientists
do not find
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have not found
 yet the way to manage waste of decayed radioactive substances so that it may rise a new pollution to environment.
At
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In
 the
last
 resort, there is another weapon which can threat our
life
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life, such
such
 as biological weapons that destroy our community systematically through their outbreaks and contaminations. To wrap up, I do personally disagree with the outweighing benefit of nuclear technology in our life and propose another type of safe innovations for human kind.

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