air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. The ordinary people can get no advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Air
travel
has improved significantly over the past two decades.
This
is, in terms of safety, price and comfort. Earlier only
rich
Suggestion
the rich
could afford
air
travel
. With the impact of competition, global oil prices, consumer behaviour and globalisation, now even
middle
Suggestion
the middle class
class
and lower
middle
class
too started using
air
travel
. With more consumers each day, flights have been designed to carry more people per trip with more fuel efficiency.
Hence
the prices have come down in the recent past.
Also
plane
manufactureres
a business engaged in manufacturing some product
manufacturers
manufactures
have started providing more facilities for inflight passengers.
Air
travel
has improved significantly over the past two decades.
This
is, in terms of safety, price and comfort. Earlier only
rich
Suggestion
the rich
could afford
air
travel
. With the impact of competition, global oil prices, consumer behaviour and globalisation, now even
middle
Suggestion
the middle class
class
and lower
middle
class
too started using
air
travel
. With more consumers each day, flights have been designed to carry more people per trip with more fuel efficiency.
Hence
the prices have come down in the recent past.
Also
plane
manufactureres
a business engaged in manufacturing some product
manufacturers
manufactures
have started providing more facilities for inflight passengers.
Submitted by praveen1034.kumar on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: