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With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view?

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It is not doubtful that with the introduction of computers, the process of delivering education has changed to a much greater extent. Though these digital devices have expedited the availability of data, they are not substitutes of learning process that happens
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 human interaction. In my opinion, it can be expected that role of teachers may change from classroom
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 to an online
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, but
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the complete disappearance
 of classroom sessions is not possible. To commence with, acquisition of knowledge with computers involves fun and learning at the same time. Merely touching these digital devices is an activity full of enjoyment for a child. Apart from
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,
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 interactivity and relaxing attitude while learning from computer contribute to
grasping
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grasp
 knowledge in an effective way.
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, the availability of digital books and other
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 tools used at higher educational level
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has provided
 the student ever accessible source of detailed information that
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 was impossible in the past.
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, though the increased complexity of intelligent
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 embedded in the digital material brings high quality education to the students, the need of human interactive sessions would always be present at least in the foreseeable future.
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, only a human
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 can help a student overcoming his shortcomings with individualised attention.
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the expertise
 of a
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 in explaining the complexity and clarifying
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doubts
 can hardly be mimicked by the computer, no matter how much sophisticated the
software
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 is. To conclude with, according to me, teachers who are the highly respected professionals in the society will continue to play the most important role in shaping the career as well as the character of the students so that they not only succeed in their life but become better human beings too.
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