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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary world, there’s no doubt that
human’s
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human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is pushing animals and plants to the verge of extinction.
This
 situation leads us to believe that it’s too late to do something about it. But other people still have hope that there’s time to preserve and rebuild the world. Both of these points are arguable, which will be discussed before personal opinion being given. Clearly,
human’s
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human
 activities are putting the planet on fire. We’ll have used up all-natural resources in a few decades, intoxicating our water, air and land. These changes have contributed to global warming, soil erosion, contaminated air and
unconsumable
lacking a conscience
unconscionable
 water. All of
this
 upset the ecological balance, causing many species to lose their habitat, food supply and contaminated air kills vegetations.
For instance
, Australia is being ravaged by the worst wildfires seen in decades. The fire killed a
third
 of Koalas and their habitats, destroyed properties, houses, and all effort seem to be
little
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less
. Truly, our planet is dying.
However
, many citizens still have faith in the survival of mankind and other species. Projects to plant trees have spread out worldwide, a plentiful money
are being donated
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is being donated
 to charity to assist Australia wildfires. These actions are reminding us that it’s not too late to stop these impacts and find a way to deal with it. In conclusion,
although
 human activities destroy many habitats heavily, there is always a chance for us to do something right.
Moreover
, everyone should have more responsibility to our living space, save energy and raise awareness of preserving the environment.
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