Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit.

In modern times, the topic of the
design
of high buildings which are constructed by companies in the area of large cities became very controversial, so a group of people think that
government
should regulate
this
field,
however
the others claim that
construction
depends on companies which support
this buildings
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these buildings
this building
with finance. To my mind,
private sector
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the private sector
should be free at their opinion related to
design
. There is an idea spread among humans that organizations must be independent for designing works because they finance apartments and buildings, and I agree. Companies which deal with
construction
of skyscrapers and high buildings are professionalized in
this
area, so they have
great experience
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a great experience
.
That is
why it is more acceptable that non-
government
organizations may be
unpressured
without preparation; not prepared for
unprepared
for designing. To illustrate the case more clearly, we can show sustainable buildings in
Japan where
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Japan, where
organizations create high apartments and
businesslands
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business lands
that are durable against natural disasters.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
a government
may
intervene private
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intervene in private
construction
work. Architectural form and view is important for the city and administration officials. It means they have authority for applying some rules
on
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for
companies. As a good example may be shown that if there is extreme
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
, it may lead to disposing of structure of
city
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the city
and
this
is influential for
transportation system
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transportation systems
the transportation system
and tourism sector.
However it
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However, it
does not affect issue generally that
design
work should be regulated wholly by
government
. To summarize,
although
government
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the government
have
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has
some influence on
design
work, but
private
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the private construction sector
construction
sector
have
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has
huge power in
this
field.

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