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High job demands, stress and sense of commitment are among the main reasons people go to work when they are ill. This way they accomplish important tasks, but may infect others or get some serious health problems themselves. In your opinion should people go to work if they are sick?

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Owing to the higher requirements of job, masses go to
work
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 under the sense of commitment and stress, even when they are sick and complete their significant tasks.
This
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 phenomenon may infect others and can
be cause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of serious
health
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 issues by themselves.
However
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, in my opinion mortals must not go to
work
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 if they are suffering from any kind of illness, because it may lead to severe consequences.
To begin
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 with, people should not go to
work
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 if they are ill since it can effects of others
health
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.
In other words
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, if any
person
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 is ill and
work
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 with their colleagues and
therefore
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 coworkers may be victim of
same sickness
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the same sickness
 as they
work
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 around the ill
person
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.
For example
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, respiratory diseases
such
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 as cough and cold can be quickly passed from one
person
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 to another. Apart from
this
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, sometimes a little disease
can be lead
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can lead
can be led
 to a serious
health
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problems
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problem
 if someone not taking proper rest and
work
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 continuously without taking any kind of drugs.
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, there are more reasons that why folks should not go to
work
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 during their sickness. To be more precise, when any
person
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 is ill his or her mind is totally disturbed due to the sickness, they feel
tiredness
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tired
 and they cannot concentrate on
work
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 properly.
For example
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, if a healthy
person
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do
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does
work
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 in 30
minutes but
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minutes, but
 a sick
person
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 will take 1 hour for the same
work
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.
As a result
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, it would be difficult for the ill
person
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 to complete the task and meet the all deadlines of their
work
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. In conclusion, it is clear from the above discussion that there are many negative impacts if a sick
person
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gies
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
goes
 to
work
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. These factors may lead to
thier
of them or themselves
their
tire
 serious
health
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 problems as well as
thier
of them or themselves
their
 coworkers.
Therefore
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think sick people should not be allowed to do
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work
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the work
.
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