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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

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In years housing as being an issue of concern. In many countries, most individuals would rather
rent
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 a
house
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 because of
work
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 location and
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cost but
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cost, but
 there are
also
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 setbacks to be taken into consideration. On the one hand, many
result
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results
to
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in
 hiring an
apartment
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 than
owing
have ownership or possession of
owning
 one because of
work
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 location.
In other words
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, people would often
rent
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apartment
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an apartment
the apartment
 to a closer district to their
work
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 place.
For example
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, in busier cities with densely populated buildings and fewer
unconstructed
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 land would rather
rent
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 a place than buying.
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, for individuals who live in these busy cities are left with no choice than to
rent
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 to avoid lateness to
work
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.
Secondly
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, the
cost
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 of purchasing a finished
house
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 is quite expensive in some countries.
This
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 forces low income earners to
rent
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 than buying an
apartment
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. Research as shown that the
cost
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 of acquiring a standard
house
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 ranges between 5-10 million
naira
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Naira
more
 in
Nigeria which
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Nigeria, which
 is expensive for a salary earners of 360 thousand per annum as minimum wage. Renting put
roof
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a roof
 over his head.
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, there are some certain setbacks to renting an
apartment
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.
Firstly
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, it limits
occupants
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occupants'
 freedom. In a rented
house
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, occupants are
constained
lacking spontaneity; not natural
constrained
contained
constant
with
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by
to
set
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a set
 of rules laid down by
house
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 owners. Often times, these rules are not favourable as most countries do not have laws bidding landlords and tenants.
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, there are possible hikes in
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cost
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the cost
 of hiring without prior notice. In many expensive countries, these hikes on
rentage
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the rental
rental
 would have been enough to build a personal
house
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 after many years. In conclusion, while there are advantages of renting an
apartment
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, unreasonable rules and hikes in
rentage
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 are quite worrisome and discouraging.
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