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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

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In years housing as being an issue of concern. In many countries, most individuals would rather
rent
 a
house
 because of
work
 location and
cost but
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cost, but
 there are
also
 setbacks to be taken into consideration. On the one hand, many
result
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results
to
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in
 hiring an
apartment
 than
owing
have ownership or possession of
owning
 one because of
work
 location.
In other words
, people would often
rent
apartment
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an apartment
the apartment
 to a closer district to their
work
 place.
For example
, in busier cities with densely populated buildings and fewer
unconstructed
 land would rather
rent
 a place than buying.
Also
, for individuals who live in these busy cities are left with no choice than to
rent
 to avoid lateness to
work
.
Secondly
, the
cost
 of purchasing a finished
house
 is quite expensive in some countries.
This
 forces low income earners to
rent
 than buying an
apartment
. Research as shown that the
cost
 of acquiring a standard
house
 ranges between 5-10 million
naira
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Naira
more
 in
Nigeria which
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Nigeria, which
 is expensive for a salary earners of 360 thousand per annum as minimum wage. Renting put
roof
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a roof
 over his head.
On the other hand
, there are some certain setbacks to renting an
apartment
.
Firstly
, it limits
occupants
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occupants'
 freedom. In a rented
house
, occupants are
constained
lacking spontaneity; not natural
constrained
contained
constant
with
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by
to
set
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a set
 of rules laid down by
house
 owners. Often times, these rules are not favourable as most countries do not have laws bidding landlords and tenants.
Secondly
, there are possible hikes in
cost
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the cost
 of hiring without prior notice. In many expensive countries, these hikes on
rentage
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the rental
rental
 would have been enough to build a personal
house
 after many years. In conclusion, while there are advantages of renting an
apartment
, unreasonable rules and hikes in
rentage
 are quite worrisome and discouraging.
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