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Some people believe that government must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. What is your opinion?

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Taxation is one of the most debatable and controversial issues for centuries. Some demographics of society believe that
state
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the state
states
a state
 should charge high taxes so that better infrastructure could be provided, while others believe that it is completely preposterous.
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higher
tax
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 rate are completely justified in connection to better facilities provided by government to their citizens,
although
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, there should be
limit
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limits
 on how much you can
tax
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 someone. Public services like roads, transport system, health facilities and education all rely on the amount of
tax
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 collected by government. The more the revenue is generated in term of
tax
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 the better these facilities would be. Indeed, countries like Singapore and Australia, who charge high taxes from their residents have much solid and well maintain infrastructures. In brief, it is absolutely imperative for the country to apply high
tax
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 rates in order to provide better services to the public.
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, how much every individual and
companies
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company
 should be
charge
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charged
 should be consciously calculated. People who are earning more should pay more taxes as oppose to their counterparts.
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, companies and individuals should be liable to pay
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at
 different
tax
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 rates.
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, if a low earning citizen is urged to pay high amount of
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 in proportion to his income he will
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 motivation to add anything to the economy. Overall, if
earning
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the earning
 of the people is not taken into consideration before charging them taxes it will
further
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 exacerbate the issue of poor services.
This
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 essay argued that
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the application
 of high
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 rates is inevitable to provide better public
services but
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services, but
 it could be a matter of
dicussion
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussion
decision
decisions
 on how much
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 should be collected from each individual. In my opinion,
government
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the government
 should improve and maintain services by charging high
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 rates
to
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for
 individual and
corporates
of or belonging to a corporation
corporate
 but should be wary of the fact that how much each individual could pay without
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 them to add to the economy and infrastructure.

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