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In the past, museums stored information about culture and history, nowadays this information can be found through the internet and, therefore, there is no need for museums. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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are
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is
 no doubt these days that the
internet
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contiuns
include or contain; have as a component
contains
continues
 a lot of information that you can find about history and
culture
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 or other
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Intel
. The question is are
museums usfull
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museums, useful
museums useful
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
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 going to discuss my view and draw my personal conclusion.
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In
 terms of
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advantages
, now you can get any data from the
internet
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, there
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is
 no need for museums. The main reason to support
this
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 claim is that a report shows that 87 percent of student us
internet
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reasarch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
because
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Because
 that people stop going to museums.
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In
 other word, many people use the fast ways which
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are
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 illustrate, when people or
sudent
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
student
 want information about
history
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the history
 they search it on google
instde
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of going to the museums.
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, museums are very important in our life.
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, when you want to see historical evident you will not find it
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on
 the
internet
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, going to the museums is your best choice. In other word,
museums show
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museums, show
 us many amazing
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things
 about history or
culture
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.
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, museums
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are
 the
perfact
being complete of its kind and without defect or blemish
perfect
 place for study.
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this
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This
 is because you can find many people like you who are learning about
culture
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 or other thing.
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, people came from other country to see
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the other culture
other cultures
culture
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.
study
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The study
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 shows that most people who travel from other country visit museums.
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In
 conclusion,
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 museums are very needy to many persons while some people don't visit and need museums because the
internet
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. I believe that museums
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are
 on of the important places
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