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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The
table
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 demonstrates different moments (2005, the present and 2025
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 about the tendency of
consumption
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 of fast
food
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, in Melbourne. The types of
food
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 in the
table
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 are classified into five groups. In 2005, the
hamburger
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 and fried chicken
shows
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show
 a significant
consumption
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 and it is represented by 40 units and 35 units, respectively. While if we sum up the other three classifications, they do not represent half of the units of hamburgers. At present, it can be noted that there is an
increase
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 in the
consumption
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 of salads by 10 units. The fried rice and noodles keep the
last
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 positions and show an
increase
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 of 3 and 2 units each, respectively. If compared to the
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hamburger which
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hamburger, which
 in the
first
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position
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 and the noodles in the
last
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position
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, the difference between them is 30 units. The
table
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 shows a prediction of the amount of fast-
food
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consumption
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 for the year 2025. The
hamburger
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 shows a possible
increase
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 if we compare it with the beginning of research in 2005. At the same time, the salad demonstrates a sharp
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increase but
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increase, but
 will not be the
first
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 in the classification of fast
food
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. The
last
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position
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 will be occupied by fried rice and noodle. Overall, during these years we can see a major variation in the
consumption
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 of fast
food
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.
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, the
hamburger
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 and fried chicken occupy the
first
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position
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 on the
table
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.

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