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1. Having police officer patrolling the street is often considered as essential way to reduce crime. How effective do you think police street patrols are? What way reducing crime can you propose?

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Putting police officer roving on
street
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the street
a street
 may consider
fundamental way
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fundamental ways
a fundamental way
 to lessen
number
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the number
 of crimes. I am
incline
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inclined
 to believe that
this
 idea will minimize the reported cases of felony. Nowadays, it is perilous to go out at night, walk alone on
streets
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the streets
 due to
alarming number
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the alarming number
an alarming number
 of
crime
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crimes
 reported everyday which includes robbery, rape and violence. The notion of patrols on
street
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the street
a street
 may
diminish especially
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diminish, especially
 robbery and violence on
street
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the street
 or even rape cases.
Firstly
, increase police on
duty especially
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duty, especially
on
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in
 areas where usually recorded of most crime being committed and constant patrolling
on
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in
 dark areas will sabotage to the plan of criminals.
Also
, it is an easy access
on
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to
 authority and rampant respond if there is infraction
happen
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happening
 along the way. Taking everything into
accounts
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account
,
this
 is a great idea to place a police officer patrolling the streets because it can aid
for
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in
 cutting down and prevent crimes.
Furthermore
, it is highly suggested to escalate the
street
 lights and instill
it especially
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it, especially
on
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in
 dark places
also
 we can put CCTV for additional security.

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