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some people say that money is a best gift to give it to teenagers. some disagree with it. discuss both views and give your opinion?

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it
Suggestion
It
 is believed that
money
 can play an excellent role as a gift in the life of Adolescence. Having
money
 rather than other gifts in puberty is useful to carry out some immediate needs,
However
, at the same time, the excessive
amount
 of
money
 lead youngsters into bad habits.
Initially
,
money
 can play a significant role to fulfil the basic needs of youngsters.
Instead
 of other gifts if cash is given to them, they can buy things of their choice rather than asking parents for having more.
Similarly
, having
money
 in teenage years can help individuals to stand them up in a society to make their visions true.
For example
: if in teenage years individuals have extra cash that they can spend to learn other skills, to secure their future and boost their abilities is worthy. On the flip side, having an extra
amount
 of wealth in teenage years, sometimes lead on the way to spoil youngsters by having a bad company that cause to put them for the addiction of drugs
such
 as Alcohol and many others.
Although
 youngsters have the sense to recognise good or bad in society still the attractions of the world with the
amount
 of cash mislead them from their future plans and starts to waste
money
.
Moreover
, if the trend of wastage of
money
 starts
by
Suggestion
with
 teenage, individuals never learn the value of
money
 in their lives and they always depend on their family and friends to fulfil their needs. In my opinion, I know that teenagers have a need for finance to satisfy their wants, but it
not be
Suggestion
is not
will not be
 in a mass
amount
, that
diminishs
decrease in size, extent, or range
diminishes
diminish
 their future. To conclude,
money
, as a gift is good of its usage, is appropriate
otherwise
 if teenagers getting into bad habits nothing
bad
Suggestion
worse
 than it.

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