Nowadays many people interact with each other and have changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Generations’ nowadays human commitment
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each other is revising due to newly developed
technology
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. There are many reasons that
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relationship happens and I am inclined to believe that
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has been a drawback effect.
Relationship
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The relationship
is changed
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has changed
is changing
in many ways, one of
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reason is that most people spend
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sitting and surfing internet
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of doing activity that may benefit them and disregards some activity that has
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plans
to do so like household chores,
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the lesson
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to be recapped, exercise and spend
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with family
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they’re wasting
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playing computer games and stalking other people.
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,
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technology
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may trigger privacy and
worst it
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worst, it
can be a reason to put life in danger by posting locations and personal details in your social media account that give other people an idea of what is happening to you or posting problems
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of sharing it to their family.
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, by the above reason,
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will give a negative effect.
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of all, people will have lack of
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to finish their itinerary for the day and they will be lazy to move or even take food to eat and
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may cause them health problem and
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radiation can damage their eyes
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crimes are increasing because of social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
especially youth who keep sharing everything in which everyone can read.
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, there are many upgraded settings provided in order to minimize the danger of cybercrimes
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there is
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a public advertisement
to remind everyone to minimize sharing personal details. In conclusion, because of
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people change their relationship with family and lack private life and
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develops negative effect. Given
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situation, it is recommended to give your self-limitation of using
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technology
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and use it carefully.
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