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It is common belief that there are those who protest
relocation
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the relocation
 of big-size companies, factories as well as their staffs to rural areas. Yet, I firmly believe that
this
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 initiative is considered as a solution to the traffic congestion and a shortage of
accommodation
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. And
this
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 essay will address and enlist the following approaches. To commence with, transferring sizable corporations and their workers out of inner-city, lead to alleviate the current
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 overload. According to the recent survey, each large-scale
businesses
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business
have
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has
 hordes of workers which are considered as the chief culprit behind the traffic jam problem, especially in the rush hours. As a consequence, the shift of big companies together with their employees
to
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in
 rural areas would help tackle the congested roads.
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,
toxic waste
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toxic, waste
 from the means of transports is the key factor influencing pollution.
Therefore
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, relocating the companies, factories, and employees
to
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of
 the suburb is able to cut down on emissions into the atmosphere through the acts of lowering the extent of vehicles circulating on the streets.
On
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At
 the top of that, it firms as together with factories transfer to the suburban area in order to relieve the pressure on urban housing supply systems. In fact, the large number of workers have the propensity for opting for their
accommodation
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 near their works, giving rise to the apartment demand as well as the living cost.
Consequently
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, if there has a tremendous shift in
accommodation
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to
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in
 the suburban area, city houses and apartments price will fall and be more reasonable with city dwellers. In conclusion, by shifting employees to rural areas to work and reside, heavy traffic conditions and shortage of
accommodation
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 in city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 could be handled. From my perspective, I am certain that the aforementioned solutions will solve the problem effectively.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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