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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Do this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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It is an undeniable fact that
majority
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the majority
 of people nowadays work beyond duty hours, devoting less
time
 for recreational activities. In my opinion, I think that working for
longer
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long
 hours without taking enough break brings about more problems for individuals compared to any advantages it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of people working for extended duration of
time
.
Firstly
, It results in more financial benefits. Earning more money, employees can provide their families with more comfort in today’s fast paced, demanding life and fulfil the children’s materialistic desires.
Secondly
, longer working hours may contribute to
country’s economical growth
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a country’s economic growth
country’s economic growth
the country’s economic growth
. Stay glued to the workplaces, might increase productivity of workers as plenty of work can be done in one day and
hence
 more economic benefits is yield
,
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,
thus
 helping in advancing total economic situation of a country.
Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe that people can face serious drawbacks from longer working hours and lack of spare
time
 or in the other words
,
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,
inappropriate work-life balance.One potentially dangerous problem is that it exposes them to at-risk personal relationships.
That is
 to say, extreme working without adequate rest, increases the risk of
fatigue which
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fatigue, which
 makes it barely possible to spend
time
 with family members.
This
 in turn may result in weak family bonding and eventually people suffering from broken homes.Another obvious issue is that, working for longer
time
 may affect people’s mental health in terms of depression.Spending less
time
 for entertainment activities and lack of leisure
time
 can make lives depressing and unpleasant when people are unable to have some
time
 for themselves to enjoy life or do their hobbies.
For example
,
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,
china
a communist nation that covers a vast territory in eastern Asia; the most populous country in the world
China
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,
where most people work beyond normal working hours
,
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,
has the most depressed people in the world according to the recent findings from the national university of china. In conclusion, struggling with familial problems and health issues far outweighs any of the minor benefits that could result from working for extended duration of
time
 without enough fun
time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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