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The gas and oil are gain around the world by people and people used to the fuel due to all of them have luxurious

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The gas and oil are gaining around the world by people and people used
to
Suggestion
in
 the
fuel
 due to all of them have luxurious, many people believe that we must be researching
to
being one more than one
two
 other places for augmenting
fuel
. I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
 statement. Discuss both views and give your opinion, many people think that it is, so, as far as I am concerned, we used to decrease
fuel
 in us
.
Accept space
.
First
,
Accept space
,
 nowadays many entertainment venues use
fuel
such
 as pool which produces hot water, many people have a pool in, the house so, I completely agree, we must find a new place for
fuel
,
therefore
 if we find new
energy
 which won't finish, very benefit for future and life till end
fuel
.
Accept space
.
This
energy
 might create by unclear and blowing
.
Accept space
.
We better find other
energy
 till help problem environment as air pollution
,
Accept space
,
 greenhouse gases, genetic modification of crops, waste production, population grow water pollution, deforestation, urban sprawl, natural resource use, polar ice caps and etc.
On the other hand
, we should create a backup for
energy
 because of the
last
, we will be lost gas and oil.
however
Suggestion
However
, one issue is that we will end up potentially jeopardizing what are beautiful landscapes and people use their cars for everything. These cities have to develop and improve public transportation in order to increase the index of accessibility. To sum up:
although
 there is an advantage of finding new places to get oil and gas, which is that we can sustain and improve our living standards, the negative impacts outweigh
this
 as we will damage those environments, as well as continue to harm our health and the planet.
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