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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the world of today,
media
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the media
 has the freedom to encounter the personalities of famous people. In the result, these people become critical between ordinary people; and their personalities
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 to the viewers.
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, the privacy of these people converts into a toy to play.
On the other hand
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, some famous people allow the media to enter into their lives because they enjoy fame among viewers, even it is not in a respectable manner. There is no doubt that
group
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a group
the group
 of some personalities enjoys the fame, given by the media by entering their private lives.
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, these types of famous people perform some questionable activities,
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 they can be discussed
between
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among
 the people and viewers.
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, we cannot blame the media in
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 sort of situation. Media discuss the famous people
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from
 crossing its limits. In terms of entering
too
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into
to
 their private lives; families; and their relationships.
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, it creates serious issues for famous people and
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 their families to survive independently in society. In my opinion, the work should be limited to broadcasting general interest news, rather than creating problems for specific famous people. When media specially electronic media broadcast news on famous people's personalities, it allows a viewer to generate many harsh questions about their life.
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, it becomes impossible for a famous person to live his life freely. In conclusion, the media should be grown literate. It must have respect the privacy of these famous people. It should
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 care about the love from the fans and supporters of these famous people. Because they are the source
for
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of
 increasing popularity for their country.
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