Nowadays, technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is believed that people are monitored of what they are pursuing and doing with the
use
of technology and they don't even notice that it's happening and by whom they are being monitored. While technology has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
advantage and potential of doing
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
from monitoring to tagging these advantages far outweigh the disadvantages if used ethically. To embark on, ever since technology has intervened into human
lives it
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lives, it
changed a lot, from communication to travel everything took a great turn. Along with
this
spying and monitoring
also
improved greatly. Now, a person can easily spy on anybody with the
use
of simple equipments, not to mention about the
government which
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government, which
can
has
Suggestion
have
abundant advantages of many sources
such
as mobile number identities and IP addresses.
However
, these are used
when ever
at whatever time
whenever
necessary and at times when it affects country's security to safeguard the citizen's.
For example
, In the year 2016
terrrorist
a radical who employs terror as a political weapon; usually organizes with other terrorists in small cells; often uses religion as a cover for terrorist activities
terrorist
attack was stopped in India by tapping more than 20 people calls and activity records on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
through ethical hacking. Which is why I feel monitoring is useful. While monitoring is at times dangerous when
phising
the luring of an internet user to reveal personal details (like passwords and credit card information) on a fake web page or email form pretending to come from a legitimate company (like their bank)
phishing
websites track the activity of the users if they are doing any bank transactions or any business deals, they could
use
protection from antivirus to prevent malicious attacks. Many people are unaware that when they
use the internet their
Suggestion
use the internet as their
history is shared with service providers to exchange the transmissions and show relevant commercials that fetch money to providers. Despite these disadvantages, monitoring would definitely improve the human lives by preventing thefts through surveillance cameras and preventing unknown attacks from enemy countries by tapping the suspicious calls.
For Instance
, extreme speeds are prevented on highways in more than 20
coutnries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
by
use
Suggestion
the use
of speed cameras which fine the vehicles if they cross the limited speeds on specific roads and areas and prevented 20% of accidents caused by
overspeeding
spend more than available of (a budget)
overspending
. In conclusion, as we can obviously rule out that advantages of monitoring could far outweigh the disadvantages, despite the disadvantages which are
neglible
so small as to be meaningless; insignificant
negligible
in comparison with the advantages.
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