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In
this
 modern world, many people are reckoned to think that getting married before an
age
 of 30 is important, while others differ with
this
. After pondering over
this
 phenomenon, I deem to agree with those who think
this
 approach is
acceptible
worthy of acceptance or satisfactory
acceptable
. In
this
 essay, I will put forward my opinion along with relevant examples. 

For those who think that marrying after
age
 of 30 is appropriate for financial stability.
Firstly
,
Although
,
this
 is a vital influencing factor, But it can lead to many other issues as well. One of the major
issue
Suggestion
issues
 is
reagrding
with regard or relation to
regarding
 health. After crossing a certain
age
,
human body
Suggestion
the human body
 does not to support any extreme physical issues, especially in case of
coceiving
have the idea for
conceiving
 a child. According to the latest research, pregnancy after 30 has proven to be less
successfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
, which usually leads to critical issues for
mother’s health
Suggestion
the mother’s health
. If the couples married and conceived a child a little earlier, they would not have faced any
such
 issues.

Secondly
, As we live in a society, It is hard to find a good match if a particular
age
 is passed in arrange marriage, which is pretty common these days.
For example
, It is quite common to see
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of rejections due to
age
 factor, even for a person having a decent financial status. If they planned the career path and other factors efficiently before, they would not have faced these issues. 
 To sum up, It is very important for us to understand that
besides
 financial status and career, A suitable partner is
also
neccesary
absolutely essential
necessary
 to live a
healty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
holy
health
 life.
Hence I
Accept comma addition
Hence, I
 strongly believe that marriage before thirties should be encouraged.

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