13. Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas now many suffer loneliness and health problems. What are the causes of this and what are some solutions?

It is u
ndoubled
render capable or able for some task
enabled
that more elders tend to m
ove nursing homes
Suggestion
move into nursing homes
move to nursing homes
or senior houses nowadays rather than living in a house with their children, which leads to that they suffer loneliness and health problems. The essay will discuss about the reasons for
this
phenomenon and list out some solutions. With industrialization and civilization of human beings' societies, the structure of families have been involving constantly, which contributes that the elderly living alone or in n
ursing home.
Suggestion
a nursing home
nursing homes
the nursing home
In the past people made a living close to their families;
therefore
, they always lived under one roof so that the elderly were able to enjoy their
time
with their children and grandchildren.
However
, nowadays, in order to secure a job, under most conditions, adults need to relocate to other cities or spend major of times to secure their careers;
therefore
, they were too busy to take care of their parents or grandparents. As people are turning older, they may suffer from chronic illnesses,
such
as arthritis, heart disease and so on, which
also
will diminish their physical capacity.
This
will affect their daily activities including social activities and contribute to their mental illnesses as well.
As a result
, they feel being isolated and lonely. Many of them will end up in nursing homes. Tackling the current issues faced by the elderly needs the cooperation of the youth and local governments.  
Firstly
, it is necessary for y
ounger
Suggestion
young
adults to build up a routine to spend
time
with their elderlies.
For example
, people should schedule a fixed
time
weekly for family
time
if they live in the same cities or vocation times to travel to visit their family.
Secondly
, daily conversation via video social media will be one of useful methods to enhance the connection with their parents or grandparents.
In addition
, encouraging the elderly to participate in various activities that are promoted for them will
also
help them to live in a happy life rather than feeling lonely at home.  In summary, the change of family structure worldwide and busy daily life activities contribute that the elderly lack of the care f
rom
Suggestion
of
their family members.
This
  contributes that the elderly are having a lonely life in current societies.
Therefore
, encouraging the younger to visit the parents or grandparents regularly will help to keep the elder staying healthy. Local governments
also
should promote more activities which are suitable for senior citizens to joint in.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Happiness
  • Health
  • Exercise
  • Spending time
  • Loneliness
  • Health problems
  • Causes
  • Solutions
  • Lifestyle
  • Priorities
  • Social interaction
  • Physical activity
  • Advancements in technology
  • Promote
  • Engaging
  • Opportunities
  • Awareness
  • Family
  • Community
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