3. Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

In co
ntemporary era,
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the contemporary era
education
in universities not only pay an attention to academic
ed
ucation but
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education, but
also
guide students to stay healthy via advocating sports activities among them.
Therefore
, some people support that the same amount of financial budget as that allocated to libraries should be reserved for
sport
activities. I personally disagree with
this
view because that libraries play a more important role in students'
education
in universities.
To begin
with, the purpose of be enrolling in universities is to obtain knowledge for students. Libraries is
p
Suggestion
are
laces for students to study and
also
keep universities with excellent resources in the world.
Therefore
, it is necessary to provide enough funding for libraries to function properly so that students will be provided most up-to-date researches or information in re
levant study field.
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the relevant study field
a relevant study field
relevant study fields
For example
, libraries in medical schools provide not only quiet studying environment for medical st
udents but
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students, but
also
up-to-date research or medical data for students to keep them well-informed. Without the support of libraries, medical staffs and students will be unable to keep up with the constantly updating medical industry.
In addition
, facilities relevant to
sport
activities in universities will help students to keep fit;
however
, as co
mparing w
Suggestion
compared
ith the function of libraries in nurturing students' capacities, the function of
sport
activities ar
e l
Suggestion
is
ess important in the majority of universities worldwide, except in the universities which are specialized in nurturing athletes. In universities, students re
mains enjoying
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remains, enjoying
sport
ac
tivities even w
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activities, even
ith base equipments. The quality of
university
education
won't be affected or diminished with less fancy
sport
equipments.
However
, if libraries lack financial budgets, to update data for staff and students' study or researches will be affected.
As a result
, the quality of
university
education
will be diminished and the reputation of the
university
might be tarnished as well.   All in all, proper financial budget to
l
Suggestion
for
ibraries plays a cu
rial r
a variable color averaging a deep pink
coral
choral
carol
ole in maintaining the quality and quantity of
education
in universities and the amount of funding to libraries should be secured annually. The fu
nding t
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funds
o
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for
sport
activities is im
portant but n
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important, but
ot as much cu
rial a
made of grain or relating to grain or the plants that produce it
cereal
curl
s that for libraries due to that
sport
activities are not the major purpose for
university
students.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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