Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree.Discuss both views and give your own opinion .

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These days, traffic jams have become common headaches in our community. Some people claim that transforming parks and gardens into residential areas is the best way to solve commute problems.

However

, there are some opposite opinions on

this

issue. It is

worthy

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worth

to go through these different ideas. It’s not a difficult thing to understand why some people advocate moving these entertainment buildings from

city centers

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the city centre

city centre

. These places have occupied a large part of our busiest areas which have amassed a number of companies. That means if we construct new apartments for citizens making use of these lands, they don’t need to spend

such

a long time on the way to work. Professionals may just walk a few minutes to go to their workplaces.

Therefore

, driving cars is not a necessary routine in our daily life any more.

Additionally

, downtown areas are not perfect locations for natural sceneries, because they are so buzzing and people could not enjoy themselves in chaos.

However

, other people who hold different views

can not

cannot

be convinced by above perspectives. The

first

thing they are considering is

prices

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priced

of the land in these busy spots. It seems like that most of commuters

can not

cannot

afford to buy a suite of apartment in those pricey places.

Thus

, that will not change current situation a lot. Ordinary residents still live far away from business

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

and waste their time to struggle with traffics.

Otherwise

, we will cause heavier traffic jams when we conduct constructions to replace these recreational fields. In conclusion, relocating parks and gardens may offer a good solution for long

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

time. Meanwhile, there are some doubts about whether it works. Each side both have valid concerns about

present situation

Suggestion

the present situation

, maybe we can try

this

method in some places,

then

look forward to seeing the results.

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Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree.Discuss both views and give your own opinion .

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