the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many crimes are committed,
dividing
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divided
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by
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three main types, within Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, in the
beginning
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burglary had the highest
rate
while
,
then
, it decreased dramatically.
On the contrary
, car theft had a high level, but it remained steady.
Moreover
, robbery had a low
rate
and its
rate
do not fluctuate significantly. Regarding
burglary
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the burglary
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rate
, in 2003, a number of almost 3500 incidents occur in Newport city centre. The following year there was a small increase, but after that,
burglary
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the burglary
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rate
fall and in 2008, it reached its lowest level at 1100 incidents.
On the contrary
, it remained steady between 2008 and 2012, covering the
second
position of rates of crime. Observing car theft, it is interesting to note that it decreased a little bit from 2800 to around 2000 between 2005 and 2006 and
then
, car
theft’s
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theft
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rate
rose slowly until it reached
in
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2012 the same level
of
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in
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the beginning.
Thus
,
this
type of crime became the most common. Another important crime is robbery which is the least common and its
rate
remain
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remains
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always between 500 and 800 incidents.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the contrary".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • instances of crime
  • significant decline
  • noticeable change
  • fluctuating trend
  • relatively stable
  • minor fluctuations
  • dramatic reduction
  • converged towards
  • crime rate
  • time frame
  • notable trajectory
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