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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, robotics and
information
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 technology are gradually replacing human in many
life
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 applications and in industries. For some people,
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 evolution will bring so many beneficial effects to their
life
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 soon.
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, other people may have some concerns that we are not ready for a world in which robotics dominate humanity. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion about the fact that the evolution in robotics and
information
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 technology are more
possitve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
passive
 impact to our
life
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. On one hand, people have a valid concern that their jobs will be in serious conditions when more and more factories are using robots or
information
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 systems to replace workforces.
We
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Our
 people have had
experience
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experiences
 to witness the vast development in industries all over the world where many
labors
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labourers
 were replaced by robots or computer systems which can work much more effectively and save more operation costs for companies.
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 leads to redundance in many workplaces and more and
more worker
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more work
 to be laid off.
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, thanks to developments of artificial
intelliegence
the ability to comprehend; to understand and profit from experience
intelligence
intelligences
intelligent
 people have
much more possitive effects
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a much more positive effect
much more positive effects
much more positive effect
much more possitive effect
. For
long period
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a long period
 of time people had been
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enjoying
 a better
life
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by
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 tons of clever applicants
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 as robot cleaners, or smart home devices which have helped people save
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a lot
lots
 of time for household chores. Or the developments in
automotives
of or relating to motor vehicles
automotive
 industries by applying
information
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 technology
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 as pilot driving or driving assistance systems, people have more safe when driving on roads. In conclusion,
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 there are some potential risks in job redundance because of the development of artificial
intelligent
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intelligence
 when robotics and
information
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 can replace human. I still see the
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
positives
 impact that it can bring to us and assist our
life
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 more enjoyable.
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