Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I think that everyone can divide all advertising products and services into useless ones and useful ones. It is like looking through an information desk when you pay attention to those messages that interest you. Take me
for example
. I do not like
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
. It does not mean I do not have it at all, I have a couple of inexpensive rings as gifts from my parents. I just think, people pay too much attention to
this
stuff. I believe it is the result of mass advertising. Every day when I am watching TV, listening to the radio or reading the paper I notice many ads about getting an expensive ring, chain, necklace or
ear-rings
jewelry to ornament the ear; usually clipped to the earlobe or fastened through a hole in the lobe
earrings
. From my point of
view these
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view, these
kinds of advertising contaminate people's minds. In
this
case you are encouraged to buy things you do not really need. They make you believe you need
such
products in order to succeed or be happy. From the other side, I think that advertisements of the new detergents with up-to-date formulas to help you maintain your cloth in perfect conditions, the new cars with some extra
futures
a prominent attribute or aspect of something
features
that make your
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
more comfortable and sports goods that make your life healthier may help you to improve your life. Recently my husband and I saw an ad on the Internet about a very interesting and inexpensive vocation to Japan for a week. Is not it awesome? We like
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
. So now we are planning to find out more about it and,
may be
by chance
maybe
, make reservations. I
belief
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believe
believed
that without
advertisements we
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advertisements, we
would be unaware about plenty of
oppotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
that may make your life happier, easier and less stressful. My point is that every person has his own scale of values. So if he is
vegetarian he
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a vegetarian, he
a vegetarian he
will consider an ad about meat products useless for him.

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