Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Why do think this is? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

There are increasing numbers of youths migrating from remote areas to urbane areas leading to the fact that only
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people are still living in the
countryside
. In my opinion,
this
is a natural phenomenon happening when young people look for a better job in the big cities than it is in small villages. Anyway, I think it causes negative impacts with overcrowded in cities and pressuring on its infrastructure, and fewer the workforces to develop agriculture in rural areas. Looking for a job is always one of the most important factors for the young people. Many companies establish their businesses and facilities in big cities rather than in remote areas.
Therefore
, there will be greater opportunities for the youths to get job offers as well as a higher paid salary in cities.
Vast movement
Suggestion
A vast movement
from
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
to live in cities of the youth can lead to the fact that cities will suffer with
overwhelming amount
Suggestion
an overwhelming amount
the overwhelming amount
of
habitants
Suggestion
the habitants
. Its public services may not develop fast enough to satisfy increasing numbers of people day by day.
For example
, public transportation could be overloaded during peak hours; hospitals or healthcare clinics are always full of patients. As
such
,
authorites
Suggestion
the authorities
authorities
always encourage companies to build their factories in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
in order to divert people coming to
cities
Suggestion
the cities
. The wave of youth movement to cities
also
causes the phenomenon that there are only elders living in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside, then
the countryside then
then
there are not enough workforces for
argicutural
relating to or used in or promoting agriculture or farming
agricultural
development
.
Then
more farms will be abandoned. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, more and more young people are moving to cities from rural areas
nowsday
to look for a
development
in their career.
This
cause negative
development
that cities will suffer more pressure on its public services as well as it may decrease the
development
for
argiculture
a large-scale farming enterprise
agriculture
.
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