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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is said that because of the evolution of
communication
 technology and
transportation
, people are freely working and living anywhere they want. In my opinion,
this
 trend brings many more benefits than drawbacks.
First
, rapid development of
communication
 technologies helps people contact
to
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with
 each other
immediately even
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immediately, even
 they are
current
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currently
 in a very far distance. People
rely
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will rely
 on today’s powerful technology devices to work at anytime and anywhere by using their laptops, smart phones
to
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in
 response to task immediately.
Therefore
, they may not need to be
at
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in
 office same as a nine to five job in the past. Students abroad can talk to their parents while they are studying in a country which is halfway around the world
by
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of
 video calls which they can share
to
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with
 each other about their life daily.
Second
, thanks to the development of
transportation
, long distance becomes shorter for
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
travellers
, and people now easy to choose a suitable place to live and work.
For example
, an employee who is working in
city’s downtown
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the city’s downtown
a city’s downtown
 can easily set up his living in suburban area nearby wherever there is a rapid
transportation
 connecting these two areas. Anyway, there still has a drawback that today people have less face-to-face appointments than before because
communication
 technologies have helped them keep in touch so closely by using social network platforms for messages, emails, video calls or conferences and updates of daily or important moments. In conclusion, the development of
communication
 technologies and
transportation
 obviously has many more advantages for people to work and live anywhere all over the world than disadvantages that it may have.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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