Many people think that successful people’s accomplishments depend on the regions they come from, while other people think that it doesn’t matter where a person comes from, if that person has the will to succeed, he/she will triumph. What do you think?

#people #people’s #accomplishments #regions #doesn’t #matter #person #triumph

this

contemporary Era, people get accomplishments easily by their strive or by the knowledge. In that

victory

Regions

also

contributes but some people think that

region

Suggestion

the region

doesn't matter for getting accomplished. It has both positive and negative views

refers to the speaker or writer

will explain my point of view in the following paragraphs. Most of the accomplished persons in the world are from regional part of the world. They got

victory

only by his hard work and the enormous knowledge

Suggestion

their field.

For instance

, APJ Abdulkalam is an erstwhile prime minister and chief scientist if ISRO - from one of the remote villages in

india

a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947

India

Moreover he

Accept comma addition

Moreover, he

Moreover him

Moreover him him

becoming

Suggestion

become

famous only for his knowledge not by the

region

. After his

victory

only his

region

became more famous. So, success

is depends

Suggestion

depends

on the work which towards your goal.

On the other hand

, sometime regions will play certain in the

victory

of a person.

For instance

Accept space

Steve Jobs was a founder of

APPLE company

Suggestion

the APPLE company

an APPLE company

from

Suggestion

the village in the U.S. But

that male; objective male pronoun

him

becoming

Suggestion

become

famous by his

region

's people buying his smart phone to encourage his business. And

finally

he became succeed in the business. So, the

region

also give

Suggestion

also gives

some impact on the

victory

of a person. According to my Glimpses, the

region

is not a reason to get accomplishment only hard work

Submitted by sumayaothman96 on Mon Jan 20 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

220 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise exercise.what are the reasons for this. Is this a positive or negative development?
Personal fitness trainers are becoming more and more popular in some countries. I believe this is mainly because people in these countries are becoming wealthier and busier with work. Unfortunately, this is a negative development because it prevents people from making more friends through sports.
8
band
You visited a hotel last week and left some items behind. Write a letter to the manager stating 1. Details of your stay 2. How important the items are to you 3. How you would want the items to the sent to you
I am writing to inquire about a pair of earrings that I may leave behind in the hotel. This is Mary Johnson, stayed three days last week.
<4
band
Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people thi it that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics and World cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In this day and age,adults so fewersport in their dailt life,on the one side, people think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives it is because olympics and world cups.the other sides think that there have other ways to encourage adults to do sport activities.
6.5
band
Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that higher positions are prevalently held by aged members in many organizations these days. While some people believe younger people would demonstrate better leadership, it is in my opinion that senior managers possess more advantages over the young in leading a company.
5
band
It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.
Certain people consider media, pop culture and friends to be the most important aspects that influence children’s growing up, while others believe that nearest people play a vital role. In my view, family’s attention overcomes the impact of outside factors.

Many people think that successful people’s accomplishments depend on the regions they come from, while other people think that it doesn’t matter where a person comes from, if that person has the will to succeed, he/she will triumph. What do you think?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise exercise.what are the reasons for this. Is this a positive or negative development?

You visited a hotel last week and left some items behind. Write a letter to the manager stating 1. Details of your stay 2. How important the items are to you 3. How you would want the items to the sent to you

Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people thi it that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics and World cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.