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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice?

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In
this
 modern era, people
are seem
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seem
are seeming
 to too busy and lazy to cook their own
food
. The main reason is they become tired because of their job so they buy ready made
food
. There are some advantages as well as disadvantages
also
. On the one hand, as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 mentioned earlier, most of the people work more than 8 hours of the day without any rest results they will become tired after the work. They will get paid very
well but
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well, but
 they do not have enough
tim e
an instance or single occasion for some event
time
 to cook their
food
 and clean the kitchen. Some people enjoy shopping dresses rather than grocery things. As a consequence, they go to hotels or restaurants to get tasty and
variety
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a variety
 of foods. It is a better
options
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option
 for students as they are busy
in
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with
 studies. And
also
 the cleaning time is not required so they can relax the rest of the day.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages are more dangerous, for the restaurant
food
 or ready made
food
 are not healthy enough. Many restaurants use preservatives, used oils and even rotten ingredients
also
 which are poisons to
body
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the body
.
Majority
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The majority
 of them do not have a good hygiene kitchen that may lead to conditions like
food
 poisoning. The risk of getting
disease
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a disease
diseases
 like cancer is more in the person who eats
this
 kind of
food
 for a longer period of time. In conclusion, choosing ready made
food
 from restaurants is a choice when we do not have time for cooking but we should not take it as a routine that will
leads
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lead
 to a destructive consequences. Home made foods are always healthy and good to have a happy life.

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