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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the

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Climate
change
 is one of the biggest problems that we face today. Some people believe that developed nations have a greater responsibility to fight
climate
 problems like global warming. I do not quite agree with
this
 view. In my opinion, developed and developing nations should work together to fight
this
 menace
that is
 threatening the very existence of life on the planet. While it is true that developed nations have the resources,
climate
change
 is too grave a concern to be tackled by a handful of rich countries.
This
 is not surprising because a big chunk of the global population lives in developing countries. As those nations develop, their need for
fuel
 will only increase. And as they consume more
fuel
, they will
also
 emit more
green house
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greenhouse
 gases. In
this
 context, the argument that rich nations are responsible for tackling
climate
change
 does not hold much water. On the flip side, developing nations need more
energy
 to
fuel
 their growth. If they reduce their consumption of
fuel
, it will have an adverse impact on their growth. A more viable solution is to ensure the participation of both developing and developed nations in the fight against environmental issues. Developed nations can use their resources and scientific knowledge to find greener sources of
energy
. They can
then
 share
this
 knowledge and technical know-how with developing nations. Meanwhile, developing nations should
also
 contribute their bit by investing heavily in existing green technologies.
For example
, solar
energy
 and wind
energy
 are already available in all parts of the world. Governments of developing nations should encourage their citizens to switch to these sources of
energy
 by subsidizing them.
For example
, the India government has announced a 20 percent tax credit on solar roofs.
This
 is a step in the right direction. To conclude,
climate
change
 is a grave problem that needs to be tackled with a sense of urgency. Neither developing nor developed nations can solve
this
 problem on their own.
However
, if they make a joint effort, finding a solution is possible.
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