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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extend do you agree?

#government #sciences #subjects #country #progress
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overnment should equally concentrate on all the subjects for the
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ultural and heritage values should
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arning a language like English is
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helps them to communicate all over the world and to express their thoughts and ideas to the other countries in the world
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ltural values and language in their school they could unequivocally contribute for the
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o, it’s important to concentrate on all the subjects to make their homeland a developed one.

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