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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagrams illustrate information about the
center
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centre
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 named Islip located in
the
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a
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 small town and the future renovation plan. It can be clearly seen
form
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from
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 the maps
huag
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hung
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tansformation
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 will
be
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occured
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occurred
 after redevelopment.
According to
the
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what is shown
tow
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two
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 new
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 will be built one in the same area
of
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as
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 the old houses just
opposit
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opposite
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 the park
the
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and the
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 other one
in
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on
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 the north side of the
center
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centre
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. Car parking and
bus
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a bus
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 station will be
availabe
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available
after
this
 renovation and they are located beside the shopping
center
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centre
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.
In addition
, the plan to
surraound
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surround
 the
center
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centre
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 with
main
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the main
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 road, the place of the school remained the same
while
 the
park
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parking
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 area
become
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becomes
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 smaller than before.
To sum up
, we could say that the
center
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centre
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 in the future will be more attractive and easy to access
it
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apply
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by the people.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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