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The table shows the amount of spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and recording the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The table shows the amount of spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and recording the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The table presents the average dollar amount spent on healthcare in some
countries
 in 2010. There are clear differences in spending between
countries
 around the
world
. In general, the country with the highest health expenditure is even higher than the average global expenditure. The average medical expenditure
of
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 the
world
 was $ 717 . Asian
countries
 spent a lot of money on health
service
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,
such
 as Japan ranked
the
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first with nearly $2,690. Singapore at $ 1,035 was
closely
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 as high as South Korea at $1,187. Compared with global average spending, Middle East
countries
 like Bahrain and Kuwait, are still greater than the moderate.
In contrast
, Latin
American
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America
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 spent under the medium of the
world
. The
least
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lowest
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 spending is Brazil which
the
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last
 ranked, it was less than six times the amount in comparison with the highest position, spent by Japan. Neither Argentina nor Chile exceeded the
world
 average spending, with $ 551 and $ 473 respectively.
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