Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

I agree, that many working people
not get
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don't get
aren't getting
enough exercise, and
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
they have health problems. Now we can see a lot of people who have
problem
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problems
a problem
with weight.
For
example in
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example, in
America they have a big problem with
this
, but another side, they have a lot of fitness club, GYM, and it is
cheep
relatively low in price or charging low prices
cheap
to go there. But most of them
laizy
moving slowly and gently
lazy
to do something or they have a lot of work and have no time to
practise
sports I can'
t
understand it. I think it depends on lifestyle and
person
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personality
. Everywhere you have to work, sometimes on a two jobs, that
have
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has
money for life, for your family. But you can see
for
example
of the famous people.
Everytime
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Every time
they they are busy, but they find a time to
practise
sport. Not just
famoust
widely known and esteemed
famous
people, I said it depends on people. I used to
practise
sport. It started when I was
child
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a child
and I try
don'
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not to give
t
give up because I like it. I can don'
t
go to the GYM,
for
example
, one month, but after I can'
t
sit
on
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in
the one place and do nothing. I need it, I want to be tired. And now
this
is my lifestyle
and I
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and, I
think, that I never give up. What can be done, that people start to do exercise?
First you
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First, you
have to make yourself to do something.
For
example
, do exercise in the morning, after You need to follow what you eat. Because now people like eating fast food, they have no time to cook at home, but it does not matter. And just one day stand up and go to the gym and start to
practise
. And everything will be okay!
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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