As well as making money, business also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Apart from focusing on revenue and profit, a business has responsibilities towards the community. I believe
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each company or business has to play their part in improving the lives of people and
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environment. They should strongly follow the best practices which will benefit the world around us and its living beings. Businesses
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to ensure that their products are not affecting
consumers
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health or causing negative side effects in
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or short term.
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, if a company is selling sugary drinks,
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the ingredients and the amount of the sugar should be clearly mentioned on the
packing
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. It's their responsibility that the end user is aware of the negative side
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it can cause to the health. Companies can
also
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run awareness ad campaigns on television or radio to teach people about the positive
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health benefits due to less sugar consumption though it can decline their profit. Another example of "
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responsible" practice can be towards
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. Using
re-cyclable
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materials to build or pack an item can be expensive for a company.
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, if they are not using
environment
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friendly manufacturing material, it can be harmful
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the climate or even
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life of animals. We have seen
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incidents multiple times and there was even a massive awareness campaign by
World
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Wildlife Federation (WWF). In conclusion, a business
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to
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society just like another person who is concerned about his or her
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and neighborhood. The reach of an organization's product is far more than an individual person
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they should lead and contribute
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the betterment of everyone and
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the planet
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social responsibilities
  • contribute
  • well-being
  • community
  • philanthropy
  • sustainability
  • ethical
  • trust
  • reputation
  • accountable
  • profit-making
  • balance
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